Assignment 22A – Elevator Pitch No. 3
Elevator Pitch No. 3
Reflection from No. 2: I was really happy that people saw the improvement from this pitch to the first one, I for sure took what people said seriously to heart and changed a lot of what I did. I did decide to stand up and more around more to show people that I am motivated or passionate about my business. People realized that I had made the improvements.
What I changed: I changed the entire pitch itself, made it a little shorter and a little less rehearsed yet, tried not to make it too corny. Another important thing that I added was the ending of the pitch was a grabber to bring potential investors into my company, as a way to entice them more than just describing my product. Making it more of sales pitch.
Reflection from No. 2: I was really happy that people saw the improvement from this pitch to the first one, I for sure took what people said seriously to heart and changed a lot of what I did. I did decide to stand up and more around more to show people that I am motivated or passionate about my business. People realized that I had made the improvements.
What I changed: I changed the entire pitch itself, made it a little shorter and a little less rehearsed yet, tried not to make it too corny. Another important thing that I added was the ending of the pitch was a grabber to bring potential investors into my company, as a way to entice them more than just describing my product. Making it more of sales pitch.
Hi Stephany, I really like the way you presented your pitch. Especially, the way you started at the beginning it allowed me to picture myself having to call the doctor’s office whenever I needed to make an appointment. This made me think about how much I dislike doing that, and by having a more convenient way to make an appointment more appealing. Good job on the elevator pitch!
ReplyDeleteHi Stephany, I think you put people’s feedback at heart and tried to make improvements to your elevator pitch every time you had to do one. This constant motivation and passion you have will show others how much effort you put forth regardless of what you do. People may not notice something this small now, but I’m sure it will be noted at one point in the future for a greater reward. I think keeping the elevator pitch short and sweet is very well approach!
ReplyDeleteHi Stephany,
ReplyDeleteI was surprised to see that you changed the entire pitch. I think that was a bold move considering that this is the third one, but that does show everyone that you really considered the feedback you have received and applied that in a positive way for this assignment. I do like your new pitch though, and do not think that it is too corny.
Hi Stephany,
ReplyDeleteGreat changes from previous critques! You really have improved with the practice, and have appropriately incorperated feedback into the pitch. I agree with Samantha above about the beginning: I also enjoyed it, and thought it was executed skillfully. Your timing and confidence have improved, as well. I think this one has been your best elevator pitch yet! Good job
Hi Stephany,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a very good job at taking your critiques from the previous pitch, and changing up your entire speech in general. I've listened to your previous pitches and I definitely think you have improved greatly since the first pitch. Also, I agree with you that your ending was stronger and grabbed my attention. My only small suggestion would be to maybe stand back a little more, so we can see more body movements. Other than that, I think you did an amazing job at your post.